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jrf666
Jessica Fagerstrom
United States, NY, Olivebridge

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Billy's Hand-Me-Down Blues

My name is Billy Brown, and I am king of the hand-me-down.

I have a brother, named Sam. He is a little older than I am.

Almost everything he's ever had, has found a way to make me mad.

His old socks are full of holes. They fit my feet, but not my toes.

This old shirt that needed a mend, has elbow patches that aren't starting any trend.

The size of the pants I wear is wrong. I slip and trip on them all day long.

Wearing my brother's underwear is gross. That's the thing that I hate the most.

My shoes, too, are a hand-me-down. They're so big, I feel like a clown.

Sam's holey socks and big, stinky shoes are enough to give me the hand-me-down blues.

Wearing hand-me-downs just isn't fair. It makes me feel like Mom doesn't care.

It's my birthday today. If I get another Hand-me-down, I'll run away!

Mom is just getting home from work. She works many hours as a front desk clerk.

She is very tired, I can see. She works so hard to help support me.

"Here, Billy. This present's for you. I wish there was more that I could do."

I looked into my mom's sparkling eyes and felt much more than you could realize.

It felt great to be her son and to know she's loved me since day-one.

So, when the next hand-me-down is given to me, I'll accept it most gratefully.

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Jongleur Comment by: Jongleur - 2007-03-13 14:27
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I kind of see Denisdee's point, but I think the sharp transition could be aided by the proper picture, like seeing that mommy's wearing holey socks, too. They could be standing there, bare toe to bare toe, or have her crashed out on an overstuffed chair, exhausted, with her feet where he couldn't help but see... just a thought, with a little rounding out, this is a wonderful little story, and especially apropos to this time of financial decline.
Comment by: - 2007-02-23 18:46
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Cute, funny and very sweet! Made me smile.
Comment by: - 2007-02-14 10:23
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kinda corny but very Cute n Funny ;P

keep em' coming!
Bbounty1 Comment by: Bbounty1 - 2006-03-29 22:01
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Very good! I read stories to my five year old almost every night and as I was reading this story, I could visualize it in 'full kid book form' with illistration.
noodel Comment by: noodel - 2006-03-29 19:57
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oy i hate hand-me-downs ^^
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