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"Daddy"

A corpse
Six feet under
rotten
stinky
filthy
manky flesh
This
Is
What i
Call my father
My dad
Daddy dearest
Do you rest well
In dirt

Daddy did you love me?
A baby
Abandoned
So
Mummy and daddy can get high
Jab their arms
Lay back
And fly
Where did you fly daddy??

A baby
Left freezing
Starving
Screaming
Now an adult
With issues
Problems
And uncertainty

Where did my issues come from daddy?
Why do i cling to people daddy?
Do you think i fear i will loose everyone daddy??

Daddy would you be happy if i rode the golden train?
Than i could spin
again

and
again
and
again

Daddy do you want me to be just like you?
A junkie
A criminal

Nana says you loved me daddy
But i dont see how
Where are you daddy??
Where are you now?

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proofofyou Comment by: proofofyou - 2007-04-25 09:05
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very brutal. nice rhythm. kind of smacks you in the face. left me flinching anyway. i liked this.
Comment by: - 2006-03-30 22:17
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do u think it should be a song?? huh??
lolly Comment by: lolly - 2006-03-30 22:14
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its a song.
LauraBanks Comment by: LauraBanks - 2006-03-29 19:15
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This is very sad and disturbing. The stark reality really got to me.
Comment by: - 2006-03-29 18:51
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hey mirelina, you are spot on, taht's exactly it!! thanks so much for the awesome feedback!!
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