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girl in the mirror
I look in the mirror
And see a girl
Who is not whole.
She stares at me in part,
The missing piece?
Her heart.
Her eyes can shed no tears,
Nor joy does she contain.
For this girl
I see in the mirror
Is not whole.
I look in the mirror
And see a girl
With a deep-set scar.
Through torments and struggles
The walls went up
And the gates shut,
Emotions were bled dry
And survival kicked in.
To survive, she knew,
She couldn't risk to think.
She began to forget how to smile,
For fears of torture and pain.
For this girl
I see in the mirror
Has a deep-set scar.
I look in the mirror
And see a girl
With a broken soul.
You stare into her eyes
And enter a hollow fortress,
A black room of eternal emptiness-
The windows to the soul
Blocked of light.
All this child understands is pain.
She doesn't know of love.
All she feels is fear.
She can't see anything good.
For this girl
I see in the mirror
Has a broken soul.
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| I wonder...do you like what you see when you look in the mirror, or do you fear to see what lies behind your own eyes? I know the feelings of fear and I know full well what it is that fear brings into the heart. I must say, this is an incredible poem, the imagery fantastic, and the pain real. Great job! |
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| ok so i read this poem differently. i took it as a symbol. the entire pieces structure becomes a metaphor for depression for me. my interpretatin leads me to tell you i loved the way u started with a stanza on the feeling of something missin then the second stanza expressin the si aspect then the third line concerned wiht the utter feeling of darkness. i also like the way as the poem prgresses it becomess more engrossing the first stanza is sharp an short the last is longer an to me it gives a air of consumption. i like the repetative aspect wihtin the stanzas - this to me reminds me of the circling i experience in my manic stages. all these aspects are that which i feel in my depression. i dont know if thats how its meant to be read. but this is the way i read it an to me it made it all the more powerfull. a trulky engaging read. thanx hun. |
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Comment by: lofty - 2006-03-30 07:17
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| really liked it good stuff |
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Comment by: Min - 2006-03-30 04:48
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| Feel this needs some work. Lost me in the second stanza and 'pain' does not seem to fit in the third. Excellent stuff worth sharpening up. |
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| Powerful stuff, potent imagery. "windows to the soul/ Blocked of light" is a great line. |
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