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facadeofshadows
Rick Chiantaretto
United States, UT, Salt Lake City

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The Grove

**The periods aren't a part of the poem. I just think a poems FORM is just as important as what it SAYS. So with that, please ignore the dots :) **

I will tell you the story of a sequoia tree,
.....whose roots do not grow so deep;
It isn't the fault of the tree, now see,
.....the roots just don't downwardly seep.
And so it is that these mighty trees,
.....with their roots so insignifi'ntly low
Would tumble o'er like a tumble weed would,
.....if their roots didn't in'twiningly grow.
So in groves these monstrous trees do grow,
.....and as simple as it may seem;
The grove remains firm, though the wind fiercely blows:
.....tossing waves on a stormy sea.
And so am I, in life all alone,
.....like a giant sequoia tree;
On a hill at a point of vantage I am,
.....for all around me I see, and am seen.
Then it grows, it twists and it turns,
.....and the grove reaches out to me;
Wanting to twine its roots with mine,
.....so it adds to the strength of the trees.
But me, as I am, I retract my roots,
.....not for pride or for fear you see:
I'm on a hill, far away from the grove,
.....how could they possib'ly need me?
And so on my hill, on my vangage point,
.....I stay as one 'lone, solo tree.
Being the watchman, there in that place,
.....I warn where the storms may be.
And many a storm goes a rollin' by
.....that threaten and shake the grove.
But me on my hill sit above the threat
.....and can watch the grove brave it alone.
Then one day a storm comes in'¦
.....much more fierce than the rest.
I'm on a hill, far away from the grove '
.....and feel so solemnly blessed.
The wind, it blows, it twists and it groans,
.....as the grove struggles for life.
I warned them so, yet still they cry,
....."Help us out with our strife!"
"We need your roots, your talents and gifts,
.....your vantage point there on the hill.
"Help us now, though our branches quake,
.....with your strength they will be still."

I answer:

"I'm just a tree, with roots so low,
.....you've always done well on your own.
"My talents are weak, not like any of yours,
.....I'd rather be left here alone."
I'll freely admit, I didn't understand,
.....for it wasn't me who needed the trees '
But the grove, ah, the grove it was
.....that needed the strength of me.
And now it's too late, the storm went by,
.....tossing the grove like the waves on the sea.
I still remember the rips and the tears,
.....of a grove that had not strength to be.
Oh, I on my hill on my vantage point
.....stand up tall 'till I see the sea!
Not beaten or torn, nor frazzled or worn
.....proud to be a lone sequoia tree!
And I remember the day that He came
.....the Lord of the vineyard; see '
I'¦ I withstood, all alone, by myself
.....this solo sequoia tree!
"My friend," he said, "You missed the point
.....I set you in view of the coast,
"Not to weather the storm, to survive on your own,
.....but to help those who needed it most!"
And with a quiet look that saddened his face,
.....He blew a kiss toward me '
Just like a lover would blow to the one
.....they would probably ne'er again see.
This kiss, though firm, but suave, as it were
.....just rustled my leaves a bit '
Suddenly upwards came out my roots,
.....over and over I flipped.
And that is how this grand 'ole tree
.....who never weathered a storm
Lost my life, my vantage point,
.....for I just wanted to be left alone.

I will tell you the story of a sequoia tree,
.....whose roots do not grow so deep;
It isn't the fault of the tree, now see,
.....the roots just don't downwardly seep.
And so it is that this mighty tree
.....with roots so insignifi'ntly low
Tumbled over like a tumble weed would'¦
.....'¦for its roots didn't in'twiningly grow.

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MMerlino Comment by: MMerlino - 2007-08-01 22:57
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stick to computers.
Harris3dgn Comment by: Harris3dgn - 2007-03-29 15:03
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Form is very important I agree. The use of old style language works well with your chosen style. Good message as well. A good poem overall.
ChazMatthews Comment by: ChazMatthews - 2007-03-17 08:49
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You turned bland subject matter into something infinitely more interesting. GREAT work.
andrewsidwell Comment by: andrewsidwell - 2006-07-26 17:29
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We are lonely and isolated from the world, but we play such an integral role within it, no matter our make-up...the spirit oozes from this piece and give so much power to a lonely sequoia tree - to the one who relates himself to it.
Fanatstic poem!!! I want to read it again!
rabableo Comment by: rabableo - 2006-07-21 03:58
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Wonderful! Your word choice is awesome and expresses so much while it is just a simple story about a tree. If I may be allowed to read deeper meanings into your words, I'd say they're trying to tell us something. Its a lesson we must all learn:
"Not to weather the storm, to survive on your own,
.....but to help those who needed it most!"
Beautiful!
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