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hannaschofield
hannah schofield
United Kingdom, Avon, Bath

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Living In a Lie

i watched as you tore me apart
i saw you break in my doors
yet somehow i wanted the intrusion
to punish me for all my flaws

i knew everything you had to offer
i knew all ofit was unkind
yet i knew i would be shattered
reverting inward to my own mind

i hated everymoment of my lie
i hated giving you all of me
yet what was me was never taken
as the real me you couldnt see

if every day is torn apart
then what more do i look forward to
just empty and bitter thoughts
clouded with the remnance of you

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Hakuna Comment by: Hakuna - 2008-10-30 06:05
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The raw power of emotion felt here has a lasting effect.

Thanks much for shring this.
adarkvision Comment by: adarkvision - 2008-10-22 15:40
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Wow! This was brutally honest yet intimate all at once. The sounds of heartache resonate after every sentence. Thank you for such an inspiring read. Will definitely check out more of your material.
hannah01zack Comment by: hannah01zack - 2008-08-09 21:49
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i liked this poem as soon as i started reading it. it was so beautiful and i could definately connect to it.
vikrammohindru Comment by: vikrammohindru - 2008-02-01 16:54
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That was amazing .. loved it
heidrunknikander Comment by: heidrunknikander - 2007-08-16 04:02
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It is a clear description of emotions and beeing used.
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