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Bbounty1
Scott Waugh
United States, Oklahoma, B... Fu..

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Nicotine Stained Fingers

Nicotine stained fingers, draws pictures on the walls.
With eyes closed ethereal dancers,
dance naked through the halls.
While his mind grasps the realities,
relating to his fall,
from grace, his place,
high above....the tallest of them all.


The man on the pedestal, looks down on all below.
Feels the thoughts of discontent,
Ripping to and fro...
Laughingly he cries out,
to the birds there in the sky...
burrowing through the dark black clouds,
near his pedestal so high.


Trust me, Trust me, said the birds to the flies.
Then they gorged themselves insanely,
and they began to cry...
Farewell to thee, you'll only be,
another mote in his eye...
to the man on the pedistal,
sitting high in the sky.

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Comment by: - 2006-04-19 12:59
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"You'll only be a mote" around the castled king...great image. This is a wonderful write. - Leah
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-04-18 21:24
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the very first line had me hooked. very well done Scott. great rhythm and smooth rhyming, excellent choice of words...just loved it.- Bon
MaggieMay Comment by: MaggieMay - 2006-04-11 09:19
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Very rich word choices.
lolly Comment by: lolly - 2006-03-31 23:23
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Hey Wa Wa! That was fanfriggintabulous! I'm lucky because I get to listen to the music that goes with the incredible lyrics you write. I agree with what Funkylele said about how this piece could be read different ways ... a lot of your stuff is like that. I also loved the image of the birds burrowing.

You are the real deal, the next big thing. I'm going to miss you when you get too crowded. I cannot wait to see the response to your next post. Your readers are going to be bugging you for the music so you better get your cd finished!!!

P.S. It's pedestal honey. And your spelling is not atrocious. L
Funkylele Comment by: Funkylele - 2006-03-30 08:20
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Scott this is my favourite of yours so far. If it is also originally a song lyric well...it works well as a poem. I read your bio and I think you have an artist's talent as well as his soul. The opening stanza pulls. This can be read a number of different ways with the religious over and undertones emphasized or only used as metaphor.
The image of birds burrowing (like worms or moles) through dark clouds is very powerful.
Nicely Done.
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