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Idainne
Garry Alan Nixon
United Kingdom, Manchester

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I Heard You Today...

I heard you today, when I opened my book
I could smell you today when I tasted Columbia's finest

It felt like you were here like you were inside me
Running through my mind and trickling down my throat

I thought I saw you running away from me today
When I saw my shadow
You looked tall and handsome and very. very dark
Understandably so, you were a shadow

I closed my eyes today and thought I felt you
I felt the soft touch of a warm clean bed
With so many cushions
I swore you were under them

I thought to myself like I do everyday
I wish I could see you
I wish I could smell you
I wish I could hear you, touch and taste you

The phone rang today
And I told them about you
They told me to stop thinking like I do
Stop going through these motions
Stop feeling this endless devotion

My head hit my pillow today
I lay awake
Reminded of how beautiful you were lying by my side
I felt immeasurable joy
Like I was finally alive

My dreams were of you though I'd rather they weren't
I woke with tears on my pillow
Tears of sadness and joy
Joy for in that serenity of slumber I had you once more
Sadness for in the cruel awakening your warmth is no more

I sleep again until morning breaks
And takes this dreamland perfection
I wake once more to the morning light
Events of yesterday, not a sight in my mind
I take leave of my bed
And reach for a cup and my big old book


I heard you today...

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Loloix Comment by: Loloix - 2007-03-29 00:47
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love it...
Idainne Comment by: Idainne - 2007-02-02 13:15
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Ok edited a little. Hope it works better now.

xXx
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-04-09 22:55
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Awesome description...honest words, and I think the ending works well. cool stuff.
Comment by: - 2006-04-07 12:48
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I love how you've used your senses to describe things. Sarah's already mentioned one great line: 'the phone rang today/and i told them about you'. I also love the two opening lines. Really lovely.
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2006-04-01 02:57
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Good descriptions. The ending seems a bit abrupt but I guess it goes with the mood of the piece.
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