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A Christian's Walk: A Strange Fate (part 2)
It's a strange fate that we should tempt it
Bringing ourselves to a place of redemption
Forgetting all while longing for so much more
Stepping into that room, behind a closed door
Life casting upon us these cumbersome burdens
Progress being slowed by those things forbidden
Twisted apparitions appearing in the fading light
Chasing away pleasant dreams within the night
Living in the darkness, facing constant pain
The light blinding, only truthful disdain
The freedom is in the light, breathless anticipation
Stepping toward the light, a dream's requiem
Finalization of the hopes that once were
Nightmares fading as they disappear in a blur
Tears forming in the eyes as the realization hits
No longer alone in darkness, now truly blessed
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interesting addition to the first part. i agree with Maggie about loss of hope and room for something good to happen.
i think i can understand what you're saying here, about living in the darkness and knowing what the light holds...as it chases nightmares away. it is a chance you have to take, although as you have said before, stepping out of the comfort zone isn't easy, but often necessary to grow into who we are and so much more. the demons will always be within our shadow, but we choose to walk within the light. or at least try. anwyay, that's as deep as i will go into this comment. ;-) lovely poem. |
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2nd stanza was quite interesting. ...
Progress being slowed by those things forbidden
this sort of gave me a picture of Adam and Eve biting from that tempting apple.
Twisted apparitions appearing in the fading light
Chasing away pleasant dreams within the night
this kinda gave me goosebumps. As if the soul was wrestling with the demons of the past or the present.
Again, the ending is filled with the realization now blessed by a path..Christian Walk. Well written Robert...for some reason rhyming works in your poetries....a relatable piece this one is. |
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This is a good 2nd part.
First there is loss of hope completely that breaks down personal will completely, now that the naator is completely broken down there is room for something special to happen, something being forshadowed. like it. |
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