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barking mad
Richard Unwin
United Kingdom, Manchester

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Lilith

According to Rabbinical tradition, Lilith was the first wife of Adam, but he couldn't put up with her temper and cast her out.

She is a whisper on the streets
flouncing in her green gown,
searching in the jostling crowd
the materials for her cauldron,
for those whose eyes betray a longing:
of unrequited love or hopeless yearning.
Then in the country she stirs a recollection
soft as light fading along a shore
where water sips a clear lake's brim
while the last of the evening breeze sighs
among the trees; this phantom woman
who has lost her love, paddling among
the stones along the sharp-flinted margins,
delivered from oblivion even before
the first stars appeared above
that darkling hill, which is topped by a lost crown,
as she wanders a world that is drifting quietly to sleep.

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Comment by: - 2006-05-11 15:47
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Unusual subject but very well done.
Comment by: - 2006-04-23 15:18
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beautiful, I think he should have kept her. Lovely words
feywren Comment by: feywren - 2006-04-08 16:08
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Lovely remembrance of the first Lady.

Wren
Min Comment by: Min - 2006-04-06 13:09
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Really beautifully done. 'where water sips a clear lake's brim' is so evocative.
fixalvarez Comment by: fixalvarez - 2006-04-04 20:37
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"The Lion the Witch and the Wardrobe" gave a different interpretation of Lilith. I like the mystery. I would much rather view her the way you did. Great work...
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