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bigcoled
Cole Donovan
United States, Florida, Naples

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Make it Stop

No matter how old I get
The game never changes
Always struggling for rank
Trying to turn more pages
Put out more get more
Respect,
More than a seven letter word
It's what you expect
From work,
Blood sweat tears
Younger blood always coming
Feeling no fears
For every slow step I've taken
in caution
A giant leap has been taken
Fearless, looking to impress,
Respect earned through the years forsaken
Earned my way,
with every path I've paved,
No respect for my progress,
The youth today makes me feel
Like they digress
from the way we've layed infront
and behind them,
Yet we don't chide them
Don't take time to give praise
and respect our ways.
No emotion or sense of responsiblity,
Dropping morals, and increasing fertitlity.
The times have changed enough from me to my younger brother,
Let alone, through what my children have to suffer.
No trust, ruthless, backstabbing
Taking anyway to to the top,
They take and keep grabbing
never stop.
Make it stop

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Comment by: - 2006-04-04 05:17
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I really like this - it almost sounds like a rap (hope that isnt a really offensive opinion !) Some great lines - "respect earned through the years forsaken" I agree with freday - dont lose faith !!
fredav Comment by: fredav - 2006-04-03 06:14
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it's a vicious cycle..you illustrate clearly what we call 'crab mentality'--others can't stand to see you succeed so they pull you down. most people are like that, willing to shelve their morals and values just to get to the top..but hey, that's life. don't lose faith in other men though. there are still some who are inherently good and worthy. overall, with the spelling error and typos aside (fertility; taking any way to the top; from the way we've layed in front; put out more, get more Respect), this was a good read. looking forward to reading more of your work.
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