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A Latticework of Boxed-Up Stars, and Dark

[cento]

The bright sun was extinguish'd:
The blue black sky with its much-poked periods
Of stars shone with all their might.

I could taste her lipstick on the filter,
As our eyes flicked like a faulty screen
Under prickling stars: with stare, with curse.

I smelt latté mixed with fire on her breath
As she mouthed clichés with confidence:
Each catch of consonants packed with potential.

She told me how she fell to sleep
In a dirty blue chrysalis, of dreams and cold,
With the sound of his fists on the door.

The night sky is only a sort of carbon paper,
Smiling, recognising and going dark.
A single tear blistered the curve of her cheek:
She's in love with ideas, I'm in love when she cries.

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nonalienabductee Comment by: nonalienabductee - 2006-04-09 16:25
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"Mouthed cliches with confidence"-very vivid, and one of those wonderful phrases where the image is different enough to create a very singular sensation, but not so different as to jolt you from the sense of the poem. Excellent!
PiscesQueen Comment by: PiscesQueen - 2006-04-03 18:12
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Wow, I am in awe. Very detailed, beautiful words. I feel the emotions of the poem with each new word!!
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