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Onyenuchie
Onyenuchie Ikpeka
Nigeria, Lagos, Ipaja

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The cruise and crews

The cruise sort out the crews
For the cruise back home,
At times some crews crumble
While cruising.
Another course the crews take
And the cruise in line,
For the destination
Is discipline and determination
So the crews will cruise in love
Which is what the cruise is.
Some crews cruise while
Unaware of the cruise
They think all are crews
While they are the cruise
Working towards unfolding the crews
Which in turn manifest the cruiser.

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prolificsantu Comment by: prolificsantu - 2007-03-19 07:35
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Humorous...but lacks literary value...needs in the same way
audreymei Comment by: audreymei - 2006-06-18 01:05
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I like your unabashed wordplay! With the word "love" you turn the whole thing around and reveal a deeper, humorous dimension.
Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2006-06-01 17:50
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Very interesting. I kind of gotten dizzy here for a moment. I have to agree with Spinnekop, the faster I read this, the more fun it was!
great Job!
Spinnekop Comment by: Spinnekop Online- 2006-04-11 04:59
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Yeah, enjoyed this poem a lot. The faster you read it the more fun it is.... Lovely. Looking forward to reading more from you.
Comment by: - 2006-04-07 08:02
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confusing, at first. but very well done!
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