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The Capricious Wind
O' wind of whimsical ways
Crying through the leaves.
Do not beg sorrow from me,
I know your fickle soul.
I have heard you on the mountain
Venting your awful rage.
I have seen you by the brook,
A butterfly in your embrace.
I have watched you in the forest,
Decimating the trees.
I have beheld you on the plain
Creating patterns in the grass.
O' wind, you are a gypsy;
You do not have a home,
For you would be free
To ruin the homes of others,
Then return as a soft, warm breeze,
Seeking to soothe the pain.
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| Dennis, I know I am probably repeating other comments. I will bookshelf this one, too. I loved the imagery, you did a terrific job of depicting the wind - so brutal, yet gentle at times. |
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Comment by: - 2007-03-25 23:21
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I look and see at least 11 pages of comments, so I presume others have similar feedback (so sorry for the echoes).
Imagery here is fantastic. I love poems that personify some aspect of nature and in ways in which I'm not familiar.
Great alliteration in the first sentence, first stanza.
Another one of yours I'm adding to my bookself, thank you very much.
MCC |
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| I think that this is a great piece. I love the personification in the last stanza. I love when I come across a piece that inspires me to take a different direction in my own writing. Thanks for putting this out there...great job! |
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| Love your imagery, very reminscient of the romantic poets. Beautiful. |
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Nein! Tucheslachen! Einfach Tucheslachen! Just kidding. I thought it was quite put together. Good imagery. Good contrasts.
You could take out the 'the' in 'decimating the trees'. That may smooth out the rythm in that section a little.
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