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Comment by: neamae - 2006-05-06 14:39
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short but saying everything it needs to
good work |
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| You do have some fun with these single rhymes doancha? |
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Comment by: Scribe - 2006-04-15 21:55
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| Senses becoming lust drunk. Devouring. Hauntingly passionate. Wow. Very hot. |
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| 'your body of a maze'- I like the inversion of words you've used here: obviously the phrase would be 'your maze of a body', but my turning around the words, you have increased the power of the metaphor. Again, a very well phrased poem Sonia. |
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| This is great. I can feel the hunger and the passion. Nice work comes across strong and intense. It crabs you and takes you for a quick, hot ride. Nice Job |
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