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SusanCulver
Susan Culver
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You Said There Were Dolphins

Can I blame the sea,
her ribbons of want,
miles of madness,
though she is - remains -
distant sister to us both,
calling us, calling us home
in thoughtspun whispers.

Can I blame the boat,
the broken cup of it,
fighting for surface
in oilstained utters,
words I only hear in dreams now,
like your words, brother;
the unclenched fist of it
with three lives spilled out.
And then there were two.

Can I blame the men,
those weather changed men,
rough as thumbs but - oh -
so tender when they whisper
goodbye
before your landbound casket,
when they say
how they prayed with you.

Steven, you said there were dolphins
and the world could not hold
such heartborne excitement,
couldn't fetch such a beautiful sunset.
Because you loved the sea.
You loved that boat.
You loved those men.

There can be no blame.


- In Memory of Steven
Aug. 26, 1980 - March 19, 2006
Rest in peace, little brother.

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logicustracticus Comment by: logicustracticus - 2007-06-26 05:11
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not a comment just topping emails
uqbahTC1 Comment by: uqbahTC1 - 2007-06-25 23:44
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to be honest, I think this poem you got here is at some parts kind of random. I have no idea. What do I know I'm 14. I see a lot of people think this is an awesome poem, but honestly I think its kind of.... hulabula? :D idk can't find a word for it. I do like the rhymes though! ^^
PANeufeldt Comment by: PANeufeldt - 2007-06-17 21:56
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An excellent remembrence made. Such words should well rest both your remembrance and his spirit in peace. A commendable style throughout. Even the smaller actors are carefully attended and adored:

"those weather changed men,
rough as thumbs but - oh -
so tender when they whisper
goodbye"

Thank you. ~P
flameof Comment by: flameof - 2007-05-20 19:56
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reminds us all of our losses and how no one is to blame. thank you
Smurff Comment by: Smurff - 2007-05-03 08:33
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Very beautiful poem. . Deepest sympathies for your loss. thank you for sharing this.
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