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Visions
As I look in the mirror I don't see whats really there. When people look my way I do not feel I'm really there. I feel myself disappear. But only in my eyes the real in me appears. Ever so aware.
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Yes, said very nicely. I will write to you
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Comment by: - 2006-04-21 07:34
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| So much to say in so little words. Well done. Great style. |
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This is really beautifully written and as Gary has said is it very complex yet written so simplistic which is a very rare talent. It's filled with emotion and I really love how you managed to capture so many 'real' sentiments in just two lines. It appears to have a rather rhythmic tone to it also and I'm wondering if there are hints of poetry in your prose, it definitely has a poetic sound to it lace with a real sense of philosophy and in-depth understanding. I know I'm supposed to comment on areas where you may be able to improve but I honestly think that the standard and style in which this has been written is flawless, my only real quibble is that it's not longer, I'd really love to see this though expanded,
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Comment by: - 2006-04-07 21:33
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| This is just so complex, really, if you look into the eye of the piece. It is sort of the kind of work that can be interpreted in one way, or many ways, depending on the reader. I like that quality there. |
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