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Skytteflickan88
Caroline Levén
Sweden

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And I succumb

There's a roaring fire between your thighs
demands me to lit it
and I succumb
Together we will create a supernova

Sweating skin
On me, moist lips, both north and south
Wet, down your cheeks, tears of emotion
hard, down there, caused by motion

Sticky limbs, thundering hearts, heaving bosoms
choked wishes, soft demands
You ask me if I want the whirlwind in my mouth
to move downstairs
What could I do but simply nod
catch my breath and indulge in your touch
And I succumb

I am a lucky one
because you can see me
in a better light than how I see myself
And I see you
and want to do so forever

And still
you can make me
get down on my knees
crawl on all four
making me beg
moan, groan
Making me plead
making me bleed
just a little bit.
And I succumb

Make me your whore
treated like a goddess

I am truly blessed

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Comment by: - 2006-05-14 14:01
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Jeeze-wheres the cold shower! Red hot! Good-Good-Good.
Comment by: - 2006-04-24 17:11
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Yes, I enjoyed this also. If it were a steak it would be underdone; rare -bloody to cut. It is so close to the edge I can't help but cringe- in a good way. Very emotional.
Tillyboa Comment by: Tillyboa - 2006-04-17 11:05
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I think you express a raw emotion here, it feels bleak but real at the same time; great use of words :-)
kyrasdaddy Comment by: kyrasdaddy - 2006-04-06 12:21
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well, I must say, that is rather hot, your wordage was fantastic. The art of sex in a quite a different light. awesome job!
lofty Comment by: lofty - 2006-04-06 06:58
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wow hot ,super use of words really good.
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