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The wishes of the chosen rejects (Reasons - reedited)
Sometimes I want to scream
Cry my soul out, have a nap
Tear a pillow, break a glass,
I'm always last one in my class.
Sometimes I want to sing
Write a poem, draw a face
Live my life and change my style
But it always takes a while'¦
Sometimes I want to fly,
See the world then crush and die
Then to reborn, be someone new
Changed people are only few.
Sometimes I want to know
Have no rest, read, learn some more
Make others proud, pass every test
and be the smartest they detest
Sometimes I want to sit
Meditate watching the walls,
Or write a journal, I'm alone
Why in this life I'm the unknown?
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Comment by: Cherley - 2007-09-28 12:11
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It's a lovely poem that expresses all of our thoughts a different times in our lives. I just have a little suggestion, but the poem is nice the way it is.
Sometimes I want to fly,
See the world then (crash)crush and die
(You may consider something like this =To be reborn, into someone new/ may read a bit smoother.)
Then to reborn, be someone new
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| love it, I think you voiced the thoughts of many here. I for one have felt this way often. Great solid ryhme |
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"Tear a pillow, break a glass,
Because I can never pass." -- good solid rhyme scheme with the appropriate syllables spaced between.
The line repitition holds the piece together nicely, its all webbed together nicely over all i think
Great read in my opinion.
Great write. |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-07 18:22
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| You have blown so much steam that I am sure many of us wish we could in the same unique way, this was different and I like it. Keep it up. |
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Comment by: noodel - 2006-04-06 11:44
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ummm... mood swings, much? lol : )
I really like this - it's so sugar sweet, it's calming, it's blunt, it's truthful, and it's wise. don't we all feel like that sometimes?
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