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Funkylele
Daniele Ponzi
Canada, Ontario, Toronto

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She Gave Me A Licence to Kill

Just lunchtime nonsense....cause the damn girl is cool!


Can't walk by her side
Without feeling
A spotlight dancing
Stares drawn like
Moths to her fire
Golden braids snake
On rippling ebony flesh
Obsidian eyes
Pulling like gravity
Wide wild horizons
Curving to infinity
Her walk carves
The air into waves
Leaves a wake
In the oxygen that
Makes it hard to
Breathe.
Tall, made of
Infinite inseams
A highway of
Blue jeans
Lips you'd need
A paintbrush
To lipstick
Smile comes like
Heat lightning
Everyone included
In its path.
She manifests
Like celebrity and
Everyone thinks
They know her
And if not they
Should.
The crushing blow
The killing cut
Her lack of ego
Unwillingness to play
To what she'd easily
Own.
Just sweetness
In a Diva's coat
I'm taller cooler
Cleverer with her
Charm and suave
Banter punctuate
My gestures.
She cajoles from me
Every ounce of greatness.
For fuck's sake
I am James Bond
By her side!

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Comment by: - 2006-04-13 06:54
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aah, the same girl, she's got you man, love the way you describe her beside you makes you better, makes you feel like james bond, i, on the other hand, would feel more like woody allen, great rhythim man, great words moving down the page at breakneck speed, wow...

tony
Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-04-12 18:07
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Outstanding!!! I love this poem. You really described her well I liked when you said, "Her walk carves The air into waves Leaves a wake In the oxygen that Makes it hard to Breathe." I also liked that you added "Unwillingness to play To what she'd easily Own.". This is a very good poem, excellent!!
RoadPoet Comment by: RoadPoet - 2006-04-09 11:24
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What a piece!

She sounds supernatural to me; an Aphrodite of the modern age. A brilliant write that is so smooth.

A Martini shaken not stirred coming your way!
crazybeau Comment by: crazybeau - 2006-04-09 00:18
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ei there!!! nice write-up! it seem that you are caught in a seducing babe's sizzling charm.
SpadedHeart Comment by: SpadedHeart - 2006-04-07 09:24
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lol ... you make ME like her too ... well written
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