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Skytteflickan88
Caroline Levén
Sweden

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It's called insecurity

 I hear this holler in the distance

calling out to me

Reaching through the blurry walls

through the shields of my mind

into me

 

Voices weighing my soul down

drowning out the steady beating of my heart

Pushing me down

Pulling at my strings

Trying to kick my legs out from under me

 

It's called insecurity

 

You know the feeling

Like a thousand shadows are living in your chest

Whispers filling your skull

breaking your courage

 

It could just be a few words

not even a sentence

that brings you down

 

It really sucks

 


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Min Comment by: Min - 2006-08-27 08:36
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No spellings to correct here!
Comment by: - 2006-05-13 13:18
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You said it for us all. Good!
MaggieMay Comment by: MaggieMay - 2006-04-14 15:36
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Nice, love the meter and rhythm, expertly laid out!

I hear this holler in the distance
calling out to me
Reaching through the blurry walls
through the shields of my mind
into me" -- in this first stanza the 'me's may be to far apart to draw the rhythm in the way it'seems you are trying to, but i do not think ittakes away fromt he poem structure at all. :)

Whispers filling your skull
breaking your courage --- wonderful line, the imagery is purposeful and lovely.
Great write. very cool.
frumpalump Comment by: frumpalump - 2006-04-13 10:28
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haha. yeah it does suck. it's hard not to be insecure sometimes, but being secure about your every decision definately is something to strive for. in the meantime, it is something that i know i'll have to struggle with for a little while. guess this is only because i need practice. nice work with this one.
Tillyboa Comment by: Tillyboa - 2006-04-12 03:32
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Great words, I can relate to that. I like in particular "You know the feeling/ Like a thousand shadows are living in your chest/ Whispers filling your skull/ breaking your courage"
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