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Comment by: nlinde - 2007-02-23 07:04
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Great poem. I dig the vernacular, I think there is a lot more to this poem than the words are allowing, perhaps expand on this piece.
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Comment by: Ethgar - 2007-02-23 06:26
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| Beautiful! just beautiful! Your words dance beautifully around a thief with and inviting smile and gentile hands. |
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| gorgeous poem joni, absolutely gorgeous...... beautifully written and intoxicating. its stuff like this that makes me real glad to be back |
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Comment by: Gerard - 2006-04-10 11:48
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I like this this poem although I would change or omit the section:
the cavity of warmth
creeps gently into
my abyss
I think the language sounds a little cliched. Don't take this the wrong way because I think it gets in the way of othersie consistent writing. |
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Comment by: Gerard - 2006-04-10 11:48
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I like this this poem although I would change or omit the section:
the cavity of warmth
creeps gently into
my abyss
I think the language sounds a little cliched. Don't take this the wrong way because I think it gets in the way of othersie consistent writing. |
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