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Khema
Kimmy Lovestar
Canada, ontario, toronto

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Like Water

I see what you don't say-
The bother space you bear,
And feel it's not your own.
Like water, time moves,
Rushing a ruthless burden sewn.

Tumbling into your eyes,
I'm afraid I cannot
Abandon the gala space.
Once there, conscious grace,
Aware, so groovy in there.
I see fly light, like water,
Sparkling, I can't look away.

The daze alluring,
The days in awe,
Wearing my aura
On your lips.
Like a quest
In your bloodstream-
In motion, like water.

Tearing a hole in your mind-
Ripped gaping,
Rapt clandestine.
Inside churning,
Inside burning,
Like water, treading
Inside learning.

Where is the key
To flee the voracious
Monster of Love?
Holding my breath,
Still, like water.

Pacing tenderly,
Hoping to step outside
Our transcendence
For a breath of stale air.
The light is burning
A green awakening.

Eyes, be mortal!
Be still in slumber-
Wary on the peak of hunger,
Atop mourned bygones'
Salty drip drop,
A soulseat flip flop.

Seething unfastened destiny,
Vivid from heaven's scent,
Gods of poise grow taller,
Graciously ego smaller.
A mirror glass lake
Like water,
Await

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SpadedHeart Comment by: SpadedHeart - 2006-07-07 10:57
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So beautiful
Bryan Kelly Comment by: Bryan Kelly - 2006-04-27 08:00
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incredible poem. smooth and beautiful my dear! add me to your readers?
gtallen Comment by: gtallen - 2006-04-12 16:15
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Hoping to step outside
Our transcendence
For a breath of stale air.

I like this twist... the poem reads very beautifully. There are a few places where the rhythm sounds a little awkward, but they are few. Reading them out loud sifts them. Overall the poem flows very nicely.
RoadPoet Comment by: RoadPoet - 2006-04-08 20:50
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Wow reads like tidal wave; full of twists and turns yet so fluid and graceful.

I so love this line: "Aware, so groovy in there I see fly light, like water Sparkling, I canā??t look away."

A very cool poem which reads so smoothly.

Nice!
Comment by: - 2006-04-08 10:02
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I'm in awe. the last 3 lines "a mirror glass lake/ like water/ await" are beautiful, i've been repeating that like a mantra since i read it.
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