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Who are you
Sorry for being so boring
Tug at my shirt if I'm snoring
Life isn't all fairgrounds
And daring
About giving and sharing
Tell me where I should go
Do I go with the flow?
Ride the wave to oblivion
Sit at home crying and snivelling
Bite the bullet
Take the fall
Settle for fuck all
Fight a bit
Bite a bit
Take no shit
Tell me
What is it?
You know the answers
Share with me
Or
Let me decide
I'm no virgin bride
I can choose
I can say
Get the fuck out my way
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Comment by: - 2006-05-23 13:21
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It was just about one or two days ago I asked someone that very question, "who are you". Life can suprise you if you dont keep an eye out.
Of course my favorite line, "get the fuck out my way". It is my dirty mouth that you would never guess I had if you saw me in person in my preppy trendy clothes. |
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| Once again, your simple style works great. This is full of stripped down energy, with a big smack in the face at the end. Quite good. |
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| I love the rawness and the rhythm of this piece, it's excellent. Very creative work and I absolutley love the ending. Additionally, I agree 100% with the comment in your bio, that bad criticism hurts less from people that you don't know. It's a very true statement. |
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You aren't boring at all! At least I know your poems aren't... ;-)
I loved this poem, it's great! Keep up the good work! Timi |
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| You tell 'em! Love the feel of this poem. Great rhythm, good and punchy. This one's going on my bookshelf! |
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