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AlexanderEddy
Alexander Eddy
Canada

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A tiny scar

Here's a crappy little poem I did after my girlfriend left me. This is fiction, however. I'm not that emo. Just today.

That little scar on my thumb.
How long have I known it?
It's been 3 years, 262 days.
Do you remember that day?
You told me you were leaving.
I was cooking a dinner, a dinner for us.
We could eat it as we talked.
About what, wouldn't matter.
You told me you were leaving.
I was shocked, it was so abrubt.
Burnt my thumb, it stung for awhile.
But you weren't kidding.
You told me you were leaving.
That little burn didn't heal.
Not very well, anyway.
Neither did my brain.
After you told me you were leaving.
So now you're gone.
But the little scar on my thumb isn't.
So I couldn't forget you.
Even if I really wanted to.

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Vision79 Comment by: Vision79 - 2008-05-17 07:56
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This is a great poem. I agree drop some of the periods. Get some Merderma for that scar and get on with life--because you are going to be a good writer.
loiseaujoli Comment by: loiseaujoli - 2007-08-25 21:22
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I like this, and I think it'd be better without so many periods at the ends of the lines.
Don't try to be emo! Labels nullify expression.
GreenIce Comment by: GreenIce Online- 2007-07-02 21:56
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The ending.. is sweet.. love the rhyme...good poem...its always good to get those feelings out.. in a healthy way....
The Twisted One Comment by: The Twisted One - 2007-05-25 01:31
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This is a really good poem. like tatuwalker1 said, that scar represents so many scars out there.
timeakinga Comment by: timeakinga - 2007-03-04 12:29
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Cool. It wasn't crappy at all! Hope that scar healed meanwhile... Thanks for sharing your emo poem, LOL :-)
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