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I like this. Different style, and I get a bit of a grasp on the last line. It is a bit obscure, but to me that means it's thougnt-provoking because gotta search for the meaning. Great last line, very powerful.
Bookshelving. |
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Comment by: Manda - 2006-04-08 13:20
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| strange, but interesting. :) only think perhaps that you should remove the contraction in the first line, just to make it consistent with the other 'i am'(s) in the piece. other than that it's definitely one to be reread. |
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Charming.
'the are garden peas'-- they? |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-08 10:17
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| Not sure i get this either, but i like pizza and donuts, so well done! it made me hungry actually... |
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Comment by: ripleym - 2006-04-08 10:13
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Not sure I entirely get this one, it's definitely one of your more obscure ones :-)
'the are garden peas' - I am fairly sure you meant 'they' here though!! |
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