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Booze & Bathwater
Empty bottles & spent cigarettes litter the bathroom floor
The bathwater, cold & stale, drips from the sides of the tub & hits the floor with a
boom,
boom,
boom
I'm lost,
Dazed & confused,
Comfortably numb,
Or whatever song title you wish to tack to it
Fact is, I'm gone
I look down & watch my chest dive under the water & then quickly rise with each breath
Every so often I hear footsteps outside the bathroom door, followed shortly by a knock & a 'you okay in there?'ť
I answer back dryly, 'I'm okay.'ť
But really, I'm not
I just needed to get rid of them
I needed them to go away
I locked the door for a reason
I don't want social interaction
I can't purge these demons by talking about them
I need to drown them in booze & bathwater
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we shall suffer, till death takes us...and when it's over, they will forget. Every fuckin one of them will forget.
"Light another cigarette, learn to forget" -- Lizard King |
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| Very modern poem. |
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| Iteresting. I sort of know the feeling...except I don't drink. So I guess not....anyways, point is, I thought it was great. And the poem structure is really fun. Peace. |
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| Great ending - at 1st I wondered why you used "boom boom boom" ... water doesn't make that sound. But then realized that after drinking, sounds can be amplified. |
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Comment by: - 2005-07-02 16:56
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| thanks, man |
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