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a dalliance with brilliance
a tutelage in resilience
they fall and melt in their millions
the snowflakes of your poetry; a migration of birds
i'm following the footsteps through your words
but they melt so quickly i'm half a thought behind
and i can only sense the residual heat of your mind
still, i'll bathe in that warmth for as long as i can
dandelion time shall mark the span
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I really like this but I don't really feel that the last line is as strong as the rest of the poem. I mean, it's good imagery... it just seems a bit weak.
