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inviscera
Stevie Gray
United Kingdom, Oxfordshire, Banbury

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Across 21 Years Revisited

(To my brother with the briefcase)

Twenty-one,
now half your age,
I'm starting to understand.

Too close to see it at the time,
now a lot of miles
and a body of water between us,
something is realised.

In spite of insurmountable odds,
in some regards,
It Was A Very Good Year.

You gave me Tarantino,
tutored me in the rules of physics
(and how they applied when playing pool),
lessons in McMurphy's Law.

You performed a hundred minor miracles every day,
switched the sun on every morning.
You taught me how to survive the asylum,
and I did.

That was the important part.
Alles anders ist nur Meinung.

I may not be able to walk,
but I'll walk beside you,
as far as I can,
as long as you'll let me.



(There are probably only two people in the world who will have any idea what this is about. I'm one of them, but I'm in good company.)

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Daniella13 Comment by: Daniella13 - 2006-04-14 15:04
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I love your use of punctuation.

"In spite of insurmountable odds,
in some regards,
It Was A Very Good Year. "

I don't know why, but I really felt this poem. I'm bookshelving it to come back to later and puzzle over some more.
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-04-13 08:53
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lovely poem Sarah. I don't need to understand what it's about to appreciate your skill for writing, and I hope the other person who does know, appreciates this wonderful piece. Cool stuff. :)
timeakinga Comment by: timeakinga - 2006-04-13 00:29
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"I may not be able to walk,
but Iâ??ll walk beside you,
as far as I can,
as long as youâ??ll let me."
beautiful, as well as the entire poem. I like it a lot...
gtallen Comment by: gtallen - 2006-04-12 15:51
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"switched on the sun every morning" I like the poem. It's private--I don't feel like I need to understand it all, but I can look from a distance and realize the beauty in your craft. This is the kind of piece that means a whole lot to those it's intended for.
Bryan Kelly Comment by: Bryan Kelly - 2006-04-12 10:10
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great poem
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