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inviscera
Stevie Gray
United Kingdom, Oxfordshire, Banbury

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How I Learned To Stop Worrying And Love The NHS

More than a spoonful of sugar is needed
to help this medicine go down.
Keep it down.

The bitterness of bile,
of a hundred pills regurgitated,
the sick after-taste of strangers' pity,
of your Hippocratic hypocrisy.

'Pain is irrelevant,' you tell me.
Fuck you.
Stand here and let me hurt you for a while,
then we'll see how irrelevant it is.

The system's failed me,
my body betrays me
and my mind
is only half my own - sub-let to opiate analgesia.

I stand on borrowed, metal legs,
defined by the things I cannot do,
rather than by the things I can.

I'm not looking for sympathy.
I don't need your empathy.
I don't want help or special dispensation,
I'm not interested in your compassion.

I just want you to know
that, while you haven't fixed me,
you never broke me either.

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PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-06-20 07:45
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The second to last stanza is very powerful and portrays the anger felt in the poem. The last stanza wraps up the poem perfectly. Good choice of words makes this poem great. **
oddfruit Comment by: oddfruit - 2006-04-20 09:57
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Loving reading your work. You have a real talent
Devatchka Comment by: Devatchka - 2006-04-13 17:27
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Fucker you're good. The words sound good together, it's passionate and angry. As all people should be.
gtallen Comment by: gtallen - 2006-04-12 11:09
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I think the poem is really focused and the last stanza leaves a powerful finality... lots of anger pent up in the piece... certainly supported by the repetition of the things you "don't need." The poem is all inside, it seems.
oncemore Comment by: oncemore - 2006-04-12 07:24
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Another great one.

"defined by the things I cannot do,
rather than by the things I can"

I found that bit and the ending very powerful and moving.
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