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Dance6
Ashley Woods
United States

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Gone forever

When the wind blows, it softens my heart despite the fact that it has been permanently hardened
When the wind blows, it talks
It tells me its life story
When the wind blows, it hugs my soul and bestows a warmness upon it
It bestows a feeling of joy and bliss, when the wind blows
When it blows it forces me to look to the future
It reminds me of my past, where my culture has come from and been through,
As it blows, comfort is exposed
Proposed,
Disclosed,
But not yet accepted
When the wind blows, it blows away all my hidden struggle and pain
As the wind blows, fear is erased
The wind gives me a sense of pride, honesty, and truth
Is it Mother Nature, looking down on me as sad as can be who sends down the wind?
She says to him, 'Go down make her troubles gone for life.'
So not only are they gone for life but gone for always,
For good,
For keeps,
Gone forever

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Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-04-20 13:07
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Thank you
Comment by: - 2006-04-20 12:53
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i like the details and rich vocab. i like how the wind was given human qualities.
Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-04-17 17:15
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Thank you!!
RoadPoet Comment by: RoadPoet - 2006-04-17 17:11
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I like the content of this poem and the use of classical language. I agree with Dan to maybe describe the wind with dynamic and possibly human qualities so that the reader can quickly associate the 'behaviour' of the wind to themselves as well, but in all I like the conviction that you show in this piece.
Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-04-12 17:03
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Ok thanks, you are a very good critiqe and i like that.
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