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JKRojahn
Kelly Barkhausen-Rojahn
United States, CO, Walsenburg

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Second Best

Not as intelligent as her brother
She couldn’t give you a spiel
About the history of any
Particular subject or answer
Any question that you may have
With a well thought out answer
That if you did your research to check
You’d know that he was correct.

Not as pretty as her sister
Couldn’t do her make-up or hair to save her life
Knew nothing of fashion
And couldn’t produce a child even if she wanted to
Doctors said it would never happen.

Did what she could to hang onto what she had
But uncertainty flirted disastrously
Tempting and teasing until she could find no reason
To give in
Besides when he was away
He never seemed to miss her
Or at least not that she could tell
And upon return
He didn’t fight to keep her
The way that she had done for him
Or at least she had hoped she made that effort.

Nobody notices when she tries
Makes an attempt
Of any kind
To make things better for her life
She was never better than the rest
This little girl has always been second best.

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redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-14 09:39
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This brought tears to my eyes...I can relate I feel second best to my sister....very well written:)
GreenIce Comment by: GreenIce - 2007-06-30 22:17
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"Nobody notices when she tries
Makes an attempt
Of any kind
To make things better for her life
She was never better than the rest
This little girl has always been second best."

So sad. reminds me of...me...in a way...written splendedly. Truth usually comes out in the light some way or another...usually...I like the way it came out..although sad..but...finding a way to release whats inside...this..i believe is the best way.. :)
lolly Comment by: lolly - 2006-05-08 10:23
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i'm going to keep reading until you are self-actualized
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-05-04 09:11
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I can relate to this having 2 older sisters. You did a great job expressing your feelings here. I think the 3rd stanza (as cinders said) is the boiling point. maybe his disregard of her really made all the difference, and finallized what she thought about herself all along. great write.
YeOldeFart Comment by: YeOldeFart - 2006-04-12 17:57
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1st thing I wanted to say was, "This little girl has never looked beyond what she considers second best. God, I want to lecture you on "looking for the good as hard as you look for the second best," but I'll resist. Besides, I just did.
Your poem was expressive and well written. You laid your thoughts right out there, said what you felt, and made us readers feel your pain. That's the essence of poetry. Well done.
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