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Hence Deduce
Nicholas Crotty
South Africa, Gauteng, Johannesburg

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Dirty

Lying on white cotton
i fell into furnace eyes
trying to say words that have remained unspoken
till this moment yet your
lullaby soothing eyes
ease the pain of remembrance

Surreal events unfold in my mind; I
exhale them onto you,
create a burden that isn't yours.
redundant that trust is now, fears of
extortion plague me because I
told you mine.

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Robin Lockheart Comment by: Robin Lockheart - 2007-06-29 00:11
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Now that I am better at commenting, I shall give you a better one than my last. ^.^


Very well written and it flows beautifully. And I can kinda relate to the... feel, I guess, of it. Its quite pretty in a way.

Robin
Angelica Comment by: Angelica - 2007-06-08 02:24
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liar
you are a writer
halpert Comment by: halpert - 2007-01-27 22:41
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I really like your word choice. nicely written =]
Comment by: - 2006-10-03 13:58
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brilliant let out of the soul and mind. raw and there-forth for the world to see inside you! nicely done!
Comment by: - 2006-08-28 17:28
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Another great poem. This is very honest and raw with such fright of being held hostage of an emotional type. These last three lines are very strong.

Enrique
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