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Stare
Her stare Was shallow her mouth in a twist words bounce blows no reaction
She is lost between illness and purification a child of organized humanity The stove between the stairs blew intimately unto her feelers. no reaction
Silence coordinated among individuals Confusion of the masses exterminated by fate Seemigly identifiable stench seeks detachment no reaction
She controls my every move, a slight twinge reflects a twinge in myself She sits undaunted so that her flowers are bare I bellow sedition so that she may hear no reaction
Her laugh, a grave in which her sorrows lie. A light treason in brain function She dances softly to crafted solutions Arms lurch to suggest relationship I tell her I once knew, but now do not what is contained in a stare
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| Interesting read....It made me think....Great Job:) |
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Comment by: daylen - 2007-07-01 20:44
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| Oh yeah, love the descriptions and comparisons. Well-worded and thought-provoking. I loved reading this poem. :) |
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Comment by: Anne - 2007-02-27 17:01
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| love the words .well put together . Very enjoyable read. book shelving it |
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Comment by: sudipal - 2007-02-22 12:39
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| good read. powerful. |
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| Interesting and well-done, but I found some of the sentences to be a little awkward, especially the last one. I like your descriptions, though, and the words you use. Good stuff. |
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