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gtallen
g taylor allen
United States, NJ, Hackettstown

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two police officers killed off a drawbridge on hackensack river

ironically,
they will not come up, not
from the shadowy waters
which silenced their fall, carried
them through the polluted depths,
drifted them through the darkness like two
pieces of litter, a beer can and an
empty bag of chips.

perhaps they would come up, like she asks.
perhaps they would shake off the murky
drops and climb the rusted metallic rungs
to take hold of a flare,
to wave it, raising a memorial of neon smoke
to the blaring horns, cursing lips and jutting fingers
saved for them last night.

and perhaps then
we would thank them,
shake their shimmering hands,
nod our heads and pretend to think twice
about an icy river current
45 feet below, how it would feel
seeping into our boots, running through our
toes, clinging our satin pants close to our thighs,
clotting our throats with polluted muck,

but no.
they won't come up, not now, not ever.
and the Hackensack river will froth under a crowded drawbridge
tomorrow.


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Comment by: - 2006-04-13 15:10
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I agree with everyone elses comments: it's a great poem.
The second stanza is my favourite, phrases like 'drops and climb the rusted metallic rungs', and 'a memorial of neon smoke / to the blaring horns, cursing lips and jutting fingers' are just amazing.
MaggieMay Comment by: MaggieMay - 2006-04-13 07:54
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I like how this poem enters itself. very effective.
Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-04-12 15:46
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This is a very good poem. I liked it but my favorite part was..

ironically,

they will not come up, not

from the shadowy waters

which silenced their fall, carried

them through the polluted depths,

drifted them through the darkness like two

pieces of litter, a beer can and an

empty bag of chips.
graceshaker Comment by: graceshaker - 2006-04-12 15:22
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poetry is so often seen as introspection these days that poetry as story-telling seems almost a lost art. this effort reassures me thats not the case. excellent visual stimulation. peaks curiosity by not telling too much. very nice.
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-04-12 10:08
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Powerful and compelling writing. Very well-written.
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