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Kissing Zen
I'm drowning!
It's ok, I stopped trying
To stay afloat.
The pull from the vast
Deep beneath
My feet is a dark
And beautiful
Caress
A Siren Song.
There is no bottom...
Thought slows down
To simple
Little
Patterns.
Release!
It comes like
A one word prayer
Soft sigh of surrender.
I marvel at all the
Effort I expended
Out of naked fear.
What is there to fear?
What can I control
Other than how
I choose
To
Feel?
I feel so beautiful!
This is the sum,
My answer to
Everything.
And I knew it, I knew it
I knew it all along
I just keep forgetting
And wanting to struggle
And expend energy
On nothing.
I'm not going to want
Wanting is a struggle
I'm just here now
Wherever this is.
Release!
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| Very powerful. It stands up as a real life depiction of someone actually drowning or as someone learning to live in the moment. That in itself gives the piece tremedous strength. Well done! |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-20 23:15
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right on brother, i was attracted to this cuz i've read a lot of that zen stuff, not a true believer or anything, found this to be an excellent read, full of truth and passion, great rhythim, always got to be careful with that out-of-control love but ultimately, careful or not, we end up giving in, the heart wants what the heart wants...good work lele, bravo!
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Comment by: - 2006-04-19 13:35
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| Beautiful romantic write. I hope I can write something like this one day for Nick. Your conveyed really well the initial panic of falling in love and all the questions that come and then just what the hell in for a penny. Fantastic.-B |
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| This is superb. Really enjoyed it; it was very well written, a silken fluidity. Beautiful and kinda peaceful and yet disturbing. From the first line you had me, it set the tone extremely well. One tiny subjective gripe: just didn't like the ending. I normally quote one or two lines from work that I liked, but I can't find any that stand out - they're all good man. |
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| wow. This is so beautiful. I hear these words in my head. Realease. Right on with that. I am jealous I didn't write it. Great stuff |
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