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erniegirl26
Xewene Fendor
United States, CA, Sacramento

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Why Smooth Jazz makes me Cry

 


Together they were a completed puzzle


But without him she falls to pieces


The way they were was beautiful'


Everyone agreed


A blessed union, a gift from above


A picture perfect model of two people in love


But now black words tumble


From his mouth aimlessly


Leaving dark clouds where sunshine used to be


And Peter White and George Benson


Have become


The soundtrack to her misery


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umbrae Comment by: umbrae - 2008-04-28 18:53
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This is really beautiful and the title is excellent.
Afrka Comment by: Afrka - 2007-12-01 09:28
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Lovely write. Full of power and emotions. Thanks for sharing.
xxsasha1xx Comment by: xxsasha1xx - 2007-04-07 09:12
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Have you ever read Sonny's Blues by James Baldwin? It's also a great piece, you reminded me of. I like the flow of the poem its smooth like jazz.The way you bring together your "broken heart" and compare it to jazz is brilliant. Looking forward to more of your work, Sasha
jakemac Comment by: jakemac - 2007-01-19 00:10
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i dig man, very cool
cozmikbrown Comment by: cozmikbrown - 2006-12-01 20:45
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I love the rhythm of your poem and the ending is magnificent. The whole poem resounds of a rainy jazzy afternoon. Beautiful.
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