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Jessie Rankin
United States, Ohio, Sunbury

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Adoption of the Star

We slept on the roof

Well, you slept

I gazed, enraptured

At the million tiny fingers of light

Blanketing the sky with bones

.

Your chest rose and fell

Evenly

And i was comforted by the stablility

But secretly, i wanted you awake

To whisper ancient lore in my ear

To dazzle me, with your

complete

disregard

for

beauty.

.

I named a star for you

One which i will never find again

but in that moment, i swear

we were infinite. you, asleep

Me, losing myself in ideas

promises that we'll never

hate each other.

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uglihed Comment by: uglihed - 2007-04-02 13:07
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Good shit man.
Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2006-07-06 21:19
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This poem is beautiful. One of the most exquisite lines, I feel, is -
'I named a star for you/one which I will never find again.' Every word
you chose, was perfect, simply perfect!
oncemore Comment by: oncemore - 2006-05-17 04:49
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Very beautiful piece. You definately have a way with words and there were some great lines in there.

"At the million tiny fingers of light

Blanketing the sky with bones"

I loved that part. A perfect description. Nice work. =)

P.S. My bird looks like yours.
Angelica Comment by: Angelica - 2006-05-16 04:15
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this is so beautiful. i love it. you have beautiful words and ideas. and you are romantic. it's wonderful
megabyte800 Comment by: megabyte800 - 2006-05-07 22:26
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Awesome. I can see this scene so clearly...

I loved "well, you slept - I gazed..."
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