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aoifemannix
Aoife Mannix
Ireland

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Time Difference

I miscalculate the hour.
It slips through my fingers,
the seconds I was supposed to wait for you,
a week or two, six months, a year,
several centuries.

I am nothing if not patient,
but it's hot here in the noon sun.
The road crackles and bursts into flames.
I cannot see you for the smoke, it fills my throat.
My watch has started to run backwards.

You have kidnapped me
from the security of nine to five,
the certainty of New Year's Eve.
There are other calendars after all,
the red dragons breathe their own years.

According to the moon,
we are already past the future.
I search for you in the stars,
wild animals race across my eyes.
You shoot out of sight, a trail of supernovas.

I walk the heavens looking for clues.

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vampirina Comment by: vampirina - 2007-11-09 10:30
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I enjoyed reading this. The exactness of language has produced quite a tight poem with no unnecessary words. As a result, the imagery is sharp and produces brilliant pictures in the reader's mind. I loved the images of 'The road crackles and bursts into flames/I cannot see you for the smoke, it fills my throat/My watch has started to run backwards' and the bittersweet symbolism of 'the red dragons breathe their own years' The poem reaches a satisfying crescendo in the last stanza and the unearthly conclusion in the final line made me want to read it again. Very great poetry indeed.
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2006-09-16 20:22
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Out of this world. ;)
Comment by: - 2006-07-05 08:55
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I'm a big fan of poems about time and enjoyed this wistful piece. You capture the heartache of being kept waiting and conveyed the sense of time loosing its meaning so well. I thought the poem read beautifully apart from the last line of the third stanza which jarred a little. Your best - 'wild animals race across my eyes' - a fantastic image.
Khema Comment by: Khema - 2006-04-01 09:28
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this poem is filled with time, something that i am fascinated by. non linear poetry is very difficult to do, and you've captured it. i will definitely be reading more of your work! K~
RoadPoet Comment by: RoadPoet - 2006-04-01 08:12
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Ermmmmm no words,

Just beautiful: pure emotion encapsulated in timeless prose!
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