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Stop attempting and just
Cretin, don't you see the harm?
Obliviously you try emulate an angel
mocking her with your wispy
metaphor of self-righteous.
In knowing you I've known
the true myth of Pandora
Slime, sins and shit lies
underneath your average appearance.
Icicles of your own making
cause your teenage angst.
Internally, beneath self-inflicted scars, only a
dim shadow resides. No more
excuses, you have no worth, just finish it.
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great writing, I really like it! Keep writing!
~Becca |
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Hi Nicholas,
If this is your poem, you should write more! Obviously all of your reading is paying off. Keep writing! |
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Comment by: gmarco - 2007-07-07 09:58
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| Such an angry wisp of poetry! Though enjoyable, it leaves one wishing for more; whether that is good or bad is not known to me. |
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| I like how you just got right out there and said what you needed to in this short poem. That made it seem very significant. Great work. |
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| Wow. That was awesome! Good writing! |
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