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nonalienabductee
Niccole Segura
United States, Pennsylvania/Ohio

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Poor Little Me

Nobody knows the trouble I've seen

Poor little, poor little, (white) little me.

My mommy's a sot and my daddy is mean

Poor little, poor little, (rich) little me.

There's nobody who comprehends me at all.

Poor little, poor little, (straight) little me.

The other girls flirt and they go to the mall

Poor little, poor little, (arrogant) me

I just want to write, but my parents say no

Poor little, poor little (college-bound) me

I just cannot live when my life is so low!

Poor little, poor little, (ungrateful) me

I write lots of poems about my life's pain

Poor little, poor little, (shrill) little me

But Philistine readers give only disdain!

Poor little, poor little, (talent less) me

For no-one appreciates poetry now

Poor little, poor little, (deluded) me

They only like writing when it's a cash cow!

Poor little, poor little, (scapegoating) me

I'll teach them to call me 'whiny', someday!

Poor little, poor little, (pathetic) me

I'll be on the cover of US Today!

Poor little, poor little, (dumb) little me 

 

Disclaimer: This is not about anyone in particular, just that class of "woe is me" rich/upper middle class white girls who don't know how good they've got it!


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Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-04-19 16:45
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OMG exccelent again. I love itt (again) lol. The repitition was used well. It was good. This is very true about many people. (Guilty) Yes true about me of course!! I love it!!
Cherley Comment by: Cherley - 2006-04-16 18:07
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I like it. It was different and I found myself saying Poor Little, poor little, right along with you.
MaggieMay Comment by: MaggieMay - 2006-04-16 14:47
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"Poor little, poor little, (arrogant) me

I just want to write, but my parents say no

Poor little, poor little (college-bound) me

I just cannot live when my life is so low!

Poor little, poor little, (ungrateful) me

I write lots of poems about my lifeā??s pain

Poor little, poor little, (shrill) little me

But Philistine readers give only disdain! " 00 love this stanza formation, works for this piece in particular for its theme.
RoadPoet Comment by: RoadPoet - 2006-04-16 09:39
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I love the inherant meaning of this poem. Brevity can really make this poem so outstanding. Very skillfully writen Niccole. Cool!
Min Comment by: Min - 2006-04-16 08:54
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I think it would hold up without the continuation with explanation. Repetition could be seen to go on toooooooo long. Perhaps you could sort out an abbreviated punchy poem from this?
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