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inviscera
Stevie Gray
United Kingdom, Oxfordshire, Banbury

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I Don't Want Your Red Roses

It wasn't you I wanted,
even then.
It was the other guy I was interested in
(more my kind),
but you were the one
who was willing to compromise.

You weren't such a bad silver medal,
I thought.
I could do a lot worse.

In truth, I was afraid
you were the best I could get,
and I might not get so lucky again.

You told me you loved me,
made a whole load of promises
(to protect and provide),
said you knew what was best for me.

You took advantage of my naivety.

When I woke up with you,
that May morning in 1997,
I knew it had changed.

No more sweet nothings.
You'd talk your pillow talk,
but not to me,
and having got from me
everything you'd wanted,
you forgot all about
your derelict promises.

Nine years on, you're still smiling
that same smile:
a few more lines,
the same old lies,
while I try to sleep in the bed you made,
and every now and then,
you send me a red rose,
to remind me
of your betrayal.

I'm not alone.
Hell, you screwed the entire country.

'On 1 May 1997 Tony Blair led the Labour Party to its biggest ever general election victory'

(http://www.labour.org.uk/index.php?id=primeminister)

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CatmanStu Comment by: CatmanStu - 2006-07-02 20:33
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Definately at your best when you have an agenda to sink your teeth into, and this is definately your best.
audreymei Comment by: audreymei - 2006-05-23 20:53
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Oh, stop playing with my heart...!

I was about to send you and email saying "Dump the bastard, dear! You've wasted 9 years!" but was relieved that you obviously do know better, enough to parody it.

However, this as well is a fantastic statement of how the Male Dominance thing in the world screws everyone over on a large scale, not just on the relationship-torture scene. Women would do it differently (I mean a real woman).
Carry on with the girl power, carry on!
yellowjacket Comment by: yellowjacket - 2006-05-23 04:18
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This has got to be one of the best written poems I have ever read, it does everything it has to so well and so cleverly.
"Nine years on, youâ??re still smiling" - I should have seen where this was going.
Comment by: - 2006-05-19 12:55
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Awesome poem, i loved the twist at the very end definately didnt see that coming. Great work.
Comment by: - 2006-05-04 15:37
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Very clever poem and very enjoyable. Thank you.
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