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I've Had Better Days
Okay, so it hurts.
I don't want to dwell on it.
If I wanted to open my heart up,
I'd have used a scalpel.
No, I don't want to talk about it.
Your chat-show sensitivity
Won't help me get through this.
I want a face to punch,
Not a shoulder to cry on.
You say I'm in denial.
I'll only prove your point
If I tell you I'm not,
So can we please forgo
All that messy textbook psychology?
I really can't be bothered
To feign interest tonight.
I'm fine.
Really, I'm doing fine.
I don't need to go soul-searching,
Because mine isn't lost,
Despite what you may think.
I'm all right,
I'm coping.
My condition is stable.
My blood pressure may be
A touch on the low side,
But that's just how I'm built.
My breathing is steady.
My heart's still beating,
Not that there's much point.
[I probably won't remember writing this in the morning. It may get revised or just erased completely.]
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| Nice black humour in this. Really liked the chat-show sensitivity line. very good |
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Very nice Saz!
"If I wanted to open my heart up,
I'd have used a scalpel"
I love those lines, very effective x |
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Comment by: tcbswan - 2006-04-18 22:05
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| very nice as it is--love the way you've snubbed the dr. phil's of the world--sometimes it just enough to be alive without all the psycho-babble we throw around like concern. very nice indeed! |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-18 12:22
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| love the raw emotion here. gorgeous. |
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i wanted to say first, i really like your style. this poem is almost like a heart-to-heart one-sided conversation, much like the way my mind works when i'm writing. i totally dig the imagery, "If I wanted to open my heart up,
Iā??d have used a scalpel."
i feel there's a dark sense of humor underneath, sarcastic, kind of sassy. lovin it! :) |
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