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Dick Darm
Dick Darm
Germany, Bonn

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Pissing

Pissing

And so, my fellow Americans: ask not what your country can do for you--ask what you can do for your country.
JFK Inaugural Address Washington, D.C. Jan 20,1961

Ahhhhhh, aint it nice to take a piss sometimes? It sure can be! But for the military even this oh so essential act of nature was not off limits. Yep, ever since our politicians went ape shit over drugs, the military has been forced to conduct piss tests. The older guys told me that it all started when the Regan's came into office. I haven't done any research on the history of pissing in the military, but it seams likely. Now, put yourself in the shoes of a young person who was brainwashed into identifying with the norms and ideologies of what your told is a free society. Uncertain about what to do with your life, you decide to act upon the call from our former president, and dedicate yourself to your country.
You join the service.
Imagine still, that you haven't yet come to grips with the fact that its all a bunch of propaganda, that, in fact, citizens from other western countries enjoy more personal freedoms than we in US. Only, you wont even debate that concept. Writing off those who would even mention such a notion as traitors or commies. Ya, your so gung ho. The brass has permoted you to Sergeant and in order to demonstrate your wholeheartedness you shave your head. The brainwashing now complete, you sign up for another four years.
Well guess what Sarg? One of your new duties is going to be watching guys dicks piss into a fuckin jar all god damn day, congratulations! But don't worry if you've been doing dope, because they throw away most of the piss. That's right! Its just too expensive to test it all. That ought to make that newly dubbed NCO feel that he's doing his part for the drug free society. Wouldn't that get you angry? You watch people whip out their sweaty fuckin genitals and piss, all day.
And for what?
Nothing!
Your just part of the propaganda machine! I loved those real eaten up guys, that always made it like you wanted to hide something. It was my turn to piss, walking into the bathroom, I'm greeted by this fuckin dude sittin on a stool.
'Heres your cup Airman!'
I took it and pulled out ma cock. The guy now scoots over to the edge of his stool peering down through his spectacles at pudd, making me feel real uncomfortable. I try and reassure myself with the Karate adage, mind over matter and I repeat to myself.
'Piss and get it all over with! Piss and get it all over with!'
Its not working!
The guy pushes his glasses back up his nose to refocus.
Now, I get the feeling that my cock has partially retreated back inside of my ass.
Kind of turning to the side I start to piss.
'Ahhhhh! That was good.'
Only my dick watcher was not diggin how I turned away from him.
'Airman!' He cracked, 'Turn back over here so I can see you urinating!'
'Fuck!' I thought, 'give it a fuckin rest, the commies wont win just because you didn't see every drop of piss leaving my dick!' I finished up put the lid on the cup, put the cup on his tray and left.
I wonder if president Kennedy hat that type of dedication in mind when he made his speech?

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oddfruit Comment by: oddfruit - 2006-05-16 11:13
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amazing. nice one Dick. brings a new meaning to pissing in the wind
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-05-08 08:16
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Holy shit! that's quite the story and a valid point for sure. I laughed quite a bit to be very honest, and at the same time it's a shitty deal what you go through for what you can do for your country. Hey man- everybody wants to have their heads shaved, sign up for 4 more years, have a big burly man stare at your dick while your taking a piss, and for what? God forbid you smoked a joint and your brain's a little fuzzy as you shoot an enemy to make your country proud of you. Here's a line for you...
...And so, my fellow Americans: ask not what your country can do for you--ask how much you're willing to piss away for your country.

Great job. I liked it.
Comment by: - 2006-04-14 11:39
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the complaint is valid(from an authors perspective at least )but
the point is too weak for my taste.What is your solution and were did you want to take me with this story? What am I suppose to walk away with? My assessment: good first draft!
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-04-14 11:33
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Reads well. I like the overriding message of the piece. 'The brass has permoted you to Sergeant and in order to demonstrate your wholeheartedness you shave your head. The brainwashing now complete, you sign up for another four years' - particularly liked the feel of these lines.
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