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redbirdjazzz
Sam Blanchard
United States, MO, Columbia

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Suppose We Have Only Dreamed.....

Deep in tunnels beneath the earth,
dark, dank holes, unbound by light,

Crawling, blinded, wracked with pain,
captive of a desperate quest,

Below reach of sun and breath of wind,
beyond the cool, blue ocean deeps,

Among these foul, uncultured beasts,
abandoned to heat of molten rock,

Baffled by twisting whorls of sulfur,
bestriding fissures, immeasurably deep.

Compelled to search for a royal heir
condemned, because I couldn't see.

Determined to regain the sun
driven by the Lion's charge.

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nonalienabductee Comment by: nonalienabductee - 2006-04-23 00:08
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I remember this book! Good book. (don't want to spoil it for anyone else) Wait . . . I swear I've commented on this poem before. . .it had a different title . . .
Comment by: - 2006-04-16 11:22
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Again and again, I am charged with your work. So much description leading to the end. Powerful verbs througout. A+.
Spinnekop Comment by: Spinnekop Online- 2006-04-15 07:24
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Hey Sam. I love the structure you use in this poem. It shows that a lot of thought went into it, and I like that. I also enjoyed your descriptions, the word choice paint lovely pictures. I read your work when you first started posting and this poem shows, for me personally, a lot of growth taking place in your art. Keep them coming.
Comment by: - 2006-04-14 17:45
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This is good, at times I was reminded of insects under ground 'Compelled to search for a royal heir, condemned, because I couldnā??t see.' I thought of ants or termites. I think this is fascinating and your use of language is really solid in this work. I also agree with the above reader, it could be literal.
Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-04-14 17:09
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Interesting. You used very good description. It is diferent from what I have read but it is really good. It could be litteral or it could be about life.
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