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mooseturkey
Tom Wells
United Kingdom, Kent, Dover

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Damage Of A Five Word Sentence

Your words are far more hurtful,


Than you will ever know


They cut deep into my heart,


And stop words in my thoat.


 


An apology cannot stop the pain,


No matter how sincere


As the recurrence of every word,


Strikes my heart with fear.


 


The playback of that sentence,


To see if I heard right


The realisation I did,


Make tears cloud my sight.


 


I wish the pain was physical,


So it could be removed


But this pain is purely inside me,


And turns my smiles to gloom.


 


I just wish and hope and pray,


That those five dark words


And their twisted bitterness,


Will not destroy my world.


 


I love you and I always will,


Forever, come what may


But this dagger that is in my heart,


Forever there shall stay.


 


This pain I have does not change,


The way I feel for you


As my love runs deep and pure,


My love for you is true.


 


The final thing I hope and wish,


Is those words I'll never say,


In the hope that you can smile


Will never feel this way.


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chant1 Comment by: chant1 - 2008-03-28 14:12
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"I wish the was physical so that it could be removed."
I was just trying to explain that same thing to a friend of mine I could not find the words to put it but you did that. But, What is the five word sentence?
Malacite Comment by: Malacite - 2007-05-04 16:45
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It has the bounce, as I've heard some put it. If you say it aloud, it has a beat of its own that makes it more interesting. The emotions it invokes and the words themselves are very powerful. Rhyme is spot on too. Excelent work.
ShatteredDreamer Comment by: ShatteredDreamer - 2007-02-15 02:21
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Fantastic smooth rhyming and a brilliant piece.
The lines:
"I wish the pain was physical,
So it could be removed" were especially poigant.

Cheers for the great read.
InHizImage Comment by: InHizImage - 2006-07-27 16:51
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Oh how much more damaging are hurtful words said than physical pain. The wounds heal, the words stay and haunt us.
Nice write!
KeepBreathing Comment by: KeepBreathing - 2006-07-27 13:31
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This is amazing. The way that you can elaborate on these feelings so well is wonderful
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