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16Angles
Have Hope
United Kingdom

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Hero-Entry 4

It was myself,
a fabrication of me,
an immitation,a falsity
..but it was me.
I looked down on myself with contempt,
I stared back up in confusion,
I bent down to look into my tired eyes
Then I told myself,
'Rise, serve your people and fight'
Then I dissapeared, leaving myself...
all alone, again

I arose and saw the castles in the distance
the castles built of purple sand,
perfectly carved by the flawless claws of nature,
I began to walk, tread, trudge, drag myself
drag these tired bones onward,
And then the skies opened,
Rain fell on my face but it was not
the rain of normality or human understanding,
It was rain of...

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Syd7 Comment by: Syd7 - 2007-11-05 11:40
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Great piece, very visual and enthralling.
mootiy Comment by: mootiy - 2007-05-27 17:08
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Very good read, really liked it.
Comment by: - 2007-03-25 07:26
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Beautiful descriptions and much thought. I actually like the open ending, I love mysteries!
Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-02-24 14:44
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very good poem. well written but like some of the others i agree you should have finished the last line .like very much though
Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-02-24 14:44
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very good poem. well written but like some of the others i agree you should have finished the last line .like very much though
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