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Dance6
Ashley Woods
United States

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** I don't have a name for it yet**

** ok, I am not sure if this is finished yet but I am going ahead and putting it up so it might not be too good


 


 


A treasure hunt with no 'X'


A journey with no ending,


Culmination,


Or means of concern


As I walk, the path goes on


It moves with my feet


When I turn, there is nothing


Nothing but the door that I walked out of days ago


It has changed


It is of the figure of a wall


Lifeless


No knob or hinges


No way in'¦ and no way out


I continue my incessant journey looking


Looking for something unknown


What am I looking for?


I don't know


It is an unknown treasure


A forgotten past


A prize


Maybe it is nothing


But either way; I will search


I will search till I find what ever it is I am looking for.


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Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-06-20 08:17
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Ok. Thank you for the comments.
willowgroveben Comment by: willowgroveben - 2006-06-14 09:32
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There is really only one line that I thin could be cleaned up, "It is of the figure of a wall."

It doesn't flow nearly as well as the other lines, which are exceptional. Even so, this poem is very precise in its' language.
It's so refreshing to read work like this.
Kudos.
YeOldeFart Comment by: YeOldeFart - 2006-06-09 18:30
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Lovely, thought provoking piece, Ashley. I think the title is evident. "My Incessant Journey."
Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-06-05 13:51
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I never really thought about it as love but it works well for it. Thanks for the comment.
Skytteflickan88 Comment by: Skytteflickan88 - 2006-06-02 01:56
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Good! Don't we all feel like this? Looking for love, meaning, the reason to exist? I like that you wrote that one can not go back, the past is the past.
The final lines are powerful and hopeful. Even if she/he doesn't find anything maybe it is the journey that is important.

Keep up the great work.
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