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agnieszka
Agnieszka Michalak
Australia, WA, Perth

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I CAN HEAR YOU, SIR THIEF

 


I can hear your:


Every move,


Every whisper,


Every thought'¦


 


 


But you don't know that,


as you creep amongst the roses,


your eyes glinting


with anticipation


for the night's spoils'¦


 


 


But I can hear you.


I know you're sneaking,


Over the fence, past


My bedroom window.


 


 


You see something,


The beast awaken;


Black and fury'¦


You see the:


Red tongue


White teeth'¦


 


 


Turn and run, little man.


Past my window,


Over the fence,


And through the roses.


 


 


Even in my sleep, I can still


Hear your; every move


Every whisper, every thought.


You see,


 


 


I can hear you, Sir Thief.


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GHOSTER Comment by: GHOSTER - 2007-11-16 13:19
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I enjoyed this poem.Very fresh,interesting and fun.Definitely a bit humor,it made me smile.Well done my friend.
Robert Barlow Comment by: Robert Barlow - 2006-12-18 17:29
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I really enjoyed the visual formating of this poem, because I felt that it added to the flow and the images brought to mind by the descriptions. Well done. --Robert Barlow
agnieszka Comment by: agnieszka - 2006-06-29 01:23
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it's already implied by 'you see something-' and the next line tells us what the theif saw; 'the beast awaken'
besides, it would lose the flow if i add two more syllables. afterall, it's only a short, simple poem. not my best
Min Comment by: Min - 2006-06-29 00:47
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Maybe add 'You see' to 'The beast awaken' to make it absolutely clear to the reader.
BlackFire88 Comment by: BlackFire88 - 2006-06-04 19:38
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This is a pretty interesting piece...when i read it i assumed the "beast" was a dog of some sort, a pet of the people living in the house, that scared away the thief, but i don't know if that is what you meant. Either way, writing it from the perspective you did made it fresh and interesting...good job!
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