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Abducted substrative essence of time;
Bringing me to a stand-still,
And exerted past the equilibrium
Of the space-time continuum.
Stuck in an erratic algorithm;
Unable to know my outcome of my next out-coming.
What variable must I apply to the
Omnipotent embodiment of time
In order to control my destination?
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Phew. I really like it. I think I stated before that I don't know much about poetry, but I like the subject and to me this flows nicely with levels of meaning. I can imagine being stuck in the algorithm . . . am I part of it or am I writing it? ;)
An excellent metaphysical- quantum mechanic influenced poem with excellent flowing meter (to be emphasized in lines 3 to 8) and rhyming couplets. Lines 1 and 2 sound dissjointed, but I have a feeling you have implemented this for effect as a 'lead in' for the proceeding flowing lines.
A lot of yoru work is very metaphysical/existensial. Much food for thought.
