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Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-06-16 09:10
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| "not the size of my girth"--you had to throw that in there. The last line is the perfect ending to this poem. "I don't wanna wanna"--just take care of my own, wish all parents were that way ** |
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Comment by: - 2006-05-23 12:58
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| just the care of your kids. Wish every parent were like that. |
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| excellent, and i totally agree. cheers! |
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| Fantastically executed. Rhyme scheme/rhythm add to the effect. |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-23 05:02
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| Really enjoyed the poem, I can't suggest anything to change. As a mum I relate to your puting your own first point but can't we do a bit of both? That's all. Good piece.-B |
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